Beats, which are a description of a character’s action, are a great way to exercise show vs. tell. If you aren’t familiar with show vs. tell, it’s a fundamental rule of good writing. (See my post using the analogy of online dating to learn why it’s so important.)
Here are some examples of how descriptive beats show the reader what is happening on a physical and emotional level:
By using beats intertwined with dialogue, the above sentences paint vivid pictures of what is happening on many levels. It does this by showing the reader, not telling the reader.
Here are three variations of the above examples, minus the beats, that tell the reader what is happening.
Do you see the difference? Words such as declared, demanded, and inquired have no place in good dialogue. Neither do adverbs such as petulantly or suggestively. Some authors think they’re supposed to use every possible word but said to describe dialogue, when in fact they should only use said – or even better, nothing at all. That’s what good beats can do for you. If you paint a clear picture of the action and emotion involved, readers can see it for themselves.
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